① Salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
② Salmons swim upstream, and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
二、省字号(')的滥用
① the government's plan
② the plan of the government
三、代词之间的性、数、格不一致
① Everyone has their homework.
② Everyone has his (or her) homework.
四、主句与从句的顺序不当
① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over, after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.
② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds, some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.
五、双重否定
① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
六、修饰语、插入语的位置不当
① The forest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.
② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the forest fire jumped the firebreak.
七、意义含糊的先行词
① The band members collected his and her uniforms.
② The band members collected their uniforms.
八、介词和冠词的滥用
① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.
② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.
九、句子缺少成分
① When aiming for the highest returns, and also thinking about the possible losses.
② When aiming for the highest returns, investors also should think about the possible losses.
十、忘记断句
① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.
② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.
